tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5285386046836172530.post4684588007224388769..comments2023-03-18T09:45:43.326-04:00Comments on carlaflower: Little Blue Notebook, Part 1Carlaflowerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17987310119813034928noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5285386046836172530.post-37181960856320094722010-07-30T11:50:14.283-04:002010-07-30T11:50:14.283-04:00thanks for the feedback, Karen! it amused me to no...thanks for the feedback, Karen! it amused me to no end that the nose-picker drove a Lexus. that's actually what inspired me to write the poem, I had to get out my notebook and record THAT and then I just kept on going. and I do the same thing with eavesdropping, Bogie's not a fan.Carlaflowerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17987310119813034928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5285386046836172530.post-59689923223428540552010-07-29T23:07:20.029-04:002010-07-29T23:07:20.029-04:00Carla - my comments are in () throughout your Coff...Carla - my comments are in () throughout your Coffeehouse poem... <br /><br /><br />Coffeehouse<br /><br />The girl beside me<br />is journaling to her heart's content<br />Out the window in front of me<br />a man in a Lexus picks <br />his nose<br /><br />(i like that nose picking crosses all social classes ... But, what is it about people in cars believing they are invisible - like the windows are one-way glass. i also liked the break in the line - so, for a millisecond we think he might be picking something we'd all want - like a venti iced-coffee for example) <br /><br />Ella Fitzgerald and Macy Gray<br />play back to back<br />while a two-year old stares at me<br />shoving her straw under her top lip<br />so it sticks out like a bad bee sting<br /><br />(great simile) <br /><br />An ambulance sirens by<br />while a line forms<br />for the caffeine<br /><br />(ambulance sirens by - much more poetic than 'the sound of the ambulance siren') <br /><br />the hiss of the steamer<br />nozzle drowns out Enya<br />as Martha informs <br />her clan that Shelly got <br />another divorce<br /><br />(i have an annoying habit of listening to strangers' conversations in public places - and then sharing what i now know with my companion "tom is getting a new mac - he thinks he might have gotten a lemon, was on with tech support for 2 hours today" HUH? "but it was during work time, so at least he got paid to be on hold" ...what are you talking about??? and so it goes :) at least I am amused. And, this line reminded me of that. and it amused me. ) <br /><br />and the girl in the<br />green apron smiles<br />"and will that be all<br />for today?"<br /><br />(GREAT finale!) <br />I want to read more Carla work!Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17801003010256509808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5285386046836172530.post-50957075834307815232010-07-26T22:43:18.459-04:002010-07-26T22:43:18.459-04:00I was an English major too! you should totally sta...I was an English major too! you should totally start writing again! dude, get a super cute little notebook and matching pen (it's more fun that way) and keep it with you in your purse or pocket and just write.Carlaflowerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17987310119813034928noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5285386046836172530.post-4021729416835577282010-07-26T22:00:59.143-04:002010-07-26T22:00:59.143-04:00I miss writing too....I used to do so much when I ...I miss writing too....I used to do so much when I was younger (hello....English major!). Then when I had Hunter, it all stopped. I get ideas but never get them to paper/laptop. You might just inspire me to start again....thanks, carla! Sandyjavawavahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08020764325259981548noreply@blogger.com